"They Say, I Say" Blog Post; 10 "But Don't Get Me Wrong"

 For simplicity's' sake, I intend to only do a brief summary of the chapter and instead focus the majority of my time on this assignment on the two exercises which we were assigned. Regarding the former, the chapter predominantly focused on surrounding dialogue with respect to any points which you make within your argumentative essays. More specifically, when and how to support your reasons with relative shortness. This includes aiming your future points in the right direction, all this, appropriately called metacommentary. As we were shown plenty of examples of effective metacommentary, we were also told what may lead to a negative effect, such as improper vocabulary or unrelated topics. Along with the examples and productive commentary on those works, we were given a surplus of templates to assist in the process of choosing the proper usage of metacommentary. In finishing our chapter, we were given two separate exercises, which of course, related to how we can better our own, as well as others metacommentary. Although tedious, upon looking over each piece of writing which was reconstructed, the difference that could be made was recognizable from the start. Beginning with exercise one, we were instructed to look upon an article and indicate ways in which the author utilized metacommentary. In doing so, we were to mark the article up and then give commentary as to what was done properly and what wasn't. And secondly, we were instructed to fill in the metacommentary templates with what we saw as proper. Both exercises are listed below, in chronological order, as usual. 

1. The article in which I reviewed, annotated, and spoke of is from The Fox News Opinion website. Only the final parts are included as the article is not only lengthy but is also well summarized in the final paragraphs. The article itself focuses on the constitutionality of the lockdowns of US religious services. The article is listed below twice, one of which is the raw copy and the latter of which being the annotated copy including a brief commentary following. 

Source: https://www.foxnews.com/opinion/cuomo-coronavirus-religious-services-betsy-mccaughey

Original Copy:

Americans need to demand that their legislators limit the emergency health powers being wielded by governors. State lawmakers need to limit the duration and scope of these powers. Some states are already doing so, including Michigan and Wisconsin. Unfortunately, in a state dominated by one party, like New York, there is no will to buck the governor.

The losers are the general public. Imagine if New York legislators were asked to vote on shutting down churches. They wouldn't dare. Yet Cuomo does it with impunity, just the way he's shutting down restaurants and other businesses people have spent their lives building. The ultimate remedy is to return to democratic government and end the reign of these petty tyrants.

Annotated Copy: 

Americans need to demand that their legislators limit the emergency health powers being wielded by governors. State lawmakers need to limit the duration and scope of these powers. Some states are already doing so, including Michigan and Wisconsin. Unfortunately, in a state dominated by one party, like New York, there is no will to buck the governor.

The losers are the general public. Imagine if New York legislators were asked to vote on shutting down churches. They wouldn't dare. Yet Cuomo does it with impunity, just the way he's shutting down restaurants and other businesses people have spent their lives building. The ultimate remedy is to return to democratic government and end the reign of these petty tyrants.

Throughout the latter annotated copy, marked are phrases and words which not only guide the audience to certain notions but also represent the measures the author is going to make a point. More specifically, anytime I bolden a word or phrase, it is representative of the importance of that statement from the view of the author. And secondly, when I underline, it shows effective metacommentary. In several examples of metacommentary throughout this brief summary, the author focused on giving readers final thoughts to carry after reading the long article. Starting with the first sentence, the author, Betsy McCaughey, emphasized what needs to be done to not concede our constitutional rights. In doing so, she prefaces the remaining parts of her summary. This same notion is carried throughout the first excerpt which all leads to the final few sentences which lack importance but utilized the prior importance to convey the most points possible. This was likely done to simplify matters for the readers who just read such a lengthy piece. Within the final sentences, Betsy encourages readers without using any given templates, that it is up to them, creating a sense of urgency, to decide the fate of the nation. More specifically, how it is the role of the readers, to go about fixing what they viewed as flawed; in this case, the violations of our constitution. 

2.  As for our second exercise, we were instructed to fill in the templates, many of which were given throughout the chapter. Each template is given and completed below: 

a. In making a case for the medical use of marijuana, I am not saying that it should be entirely legalized.

b. But my argument will do more than prove that one particular industrial chemical has certain toxic properties. In this article, I will also explain why certain properties within these chemicals are of no harm. 

c. My point about the national obsessions with sports reinforce the belief held by many corporations that sports fans spill unhealthy sums of money into sports betting. 

 d. I believe, therefore, that the war is completely unjustified. But let me back up and explain how I arrived at this conclusion: the innocents of this nation had no involvement in sparking such a ferocious war between these nations. In this way, I came to believe that this war is a big mistake. 

With that said, I conclude my tenth They Say, I Say blog post. Thank you fr reading and remain safe!





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